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01 November 2009 @ 01:40 am
Fic: "And All the King's Men" (1/1) - R  
Title: "And All the King's Men"
Author: mijan
Series: ST: XI, Academy-era fic.
Character/Pairing(s): Jim Kirk & Leonard McCoy (very tight friendship, BFF, almost-slash... oh hell, they're close), with appearances by Chris Pike.
Rating: R
Warnings: Physical violence, implied torture of a child.
Disclaimer: Gene Roddenberry is God, Paramount Pictures is Pope, and this is the blasphemy of a wayward faithful. My geeky spirit is rich, but my purse is empty.
Author’s Notes: This was posted as part of the Star Trek Big Bang, with the collaboration of vengefuldemon69 as fanartist, and jazzy_peaches as fanmixer.  My sincere thanks to my amazing beta readers, classics_geek and 001010010 , both of whom dedicated time and effort to this fic despite the demands and stresses of real life, and without whom I would have probably lost my mind. Additional thanks to hitlikehammers and nikki4noo for being awesome test-readers who gave wonderful feedback to help me keep the whole fic in perspective, and the former of whom also coded and hosted the fic on a webpage so it could all be read in one piece.

Summary:   "How many times can you patch up something before you realize that it's too fucking broken to fix, Bones?"  When a training simulation uncovers something that Cadet Jim Kirk was never meant to remember, it breaks him. Leonard McCoy can't sit by and watch Jim crumble. When asked what he's willing to do to get the old Jim back, Leonard has only one answer.  "Anything."

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bourbonightsbourbonights on November 1st, 2009 08:18 am (UTC)
I just got home and I'm so glad to see you posted this! I've unfortunately got to go to sleep, but as soon as I get home from work tomorrow, I'm reading this! Very excited!
Mijan: A Ship and a Star to steer her bymijan on November 1st, 2009 03:02 pm (UTC)
Re: !!!
Hehehe... it's there and ready to go! I hope you'll like it! :D
CleoKoneko: sexy thinkingcleokoneko on November 1st, 2009 11:18 am (UTC)
Wow. Just...wow. Amazingly written, and I never wanted it to end. You've captured them perfectly, and the Tarsus stuff is just...*lost for words*

Thanks for sharing. *bookmarks*
Mijan: Bones - Starfleet Emblemmijan on November 1st, 2009 03:20 pm (UTC)
Awww, thanks! Never wanted it to end, though? Gee, most people are saying that it's longer than the stuff they normally read, and it's a stretch to read something that long!

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it!
(no subject) - cleokoneko on November 1st, 2009 05:09 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - mijan on November 1st, 2009 05:16 pm (UTC) (Expand)
1adychaos1adychaos on November 1st, 2009 02:20 pm (UTC)
That was amazing! I love all the little permutations and the action! That gets left out too often in fanfic.

Definitely memoried.

Thank you.
Mijan: Kirk had a blastmijan on November 1st, 2009 03:22 pm (UTC)
Heee. I agree, action scenes and sequences are often totally ignored in fanfic, but to me, they're one of the best parts of a good sci-fi story. I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
ceres_libera: ns59bykissmygrassceres_libera on November 1st, 2009 03:55 pm (UTC)
This was completely awesome. I LOVE the way you twisted the TOS convention of Tarsus here, and I don't want to be spoilery for folks who haven't read the story, but THAT was a great psychological twist. I also love the way you used Pike throughout the story, and how the action of the tale was the means for all of the major actors in it (Jim, Bones, Pike and Tolland) to examine themselves and come to a clearer understanding. Also, I may have shrieked a little when I realized that you'd included a certain group from canon (trying not to be spoilery again), but rewritten their "justification" in an entirely believable fashion.

Kudos to you, mijan. This was awesome, and the strengthening of the friendship and love between Jim and Bones is truly just the icing on the cake. Brava.
Mijan: Bones&Kirkmijan on November 1st, 2009 04:06 pm (UTC)
OMGSQUEE - you read it! *bounces* I was both hopeful that you would, and also slightly worried because of the fact that both this fic and yours hit on the Tarsus theme. We both approach it in totally different ways though, but I was really curious to know what you'd think. I'd started on this plot bunny before I started reading your fic, and it was interesting to read your chapters as they came out and see what you were doing with the theme while I was already working my way through the same concept from a different angle.

I also love writing action sequences. It's something I don't see a lot in fanfiction, but I've been reading science fiction books (including tons of the old Star Trek novels) since I was a kid, and I loved the action sequences, and how they punctuated the human plotline; highlighting it, but not overtaking the human side of things.

And as for that group from canon - did you see my Author's Note at the end of the fic, below the "Click to Review" button? I couldn't believe it. I wrote that group into the fic, BY THAT NAME, without even knowing they were canon. Seriously. Ask my test reader. *headdesk*

But anyway, thank you for reading. I'm deeply flattered that you enjoyed it. :)
(no subject) - ceres_libera on November 1st, 2009 04:29 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - mijan on November 1st, 2009 04:46 pm (UTC) (Expand)
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Duty & Devotionroseandheather on November 1st, 2009 07:42 pm (UTC)
This... was absolutely fantastic. You wrote them so true, and Jim... oh, Jim.

Also I'm kind of more than a little in love with Janice Toland and want to cuddle her and make all the bad shit go away. So, yeah. Would not object to seeing more of her. At all.
Mijan: A Ship and a Star to steer her bymijan on November 1st, 2009 07:47 pm (UTC)
You liked my OC? Wow, that's a huge compliment. And also, she has a much more detailed back-story than I could include here. Her husband wasn't the only person she lost on Tarsus IV. Some more details about her ordeal on Tarsus IV, including why she went there in the first place, and more of the reasons behind why she feels SO guilty for the (assumed) death of the kid in the town square. She's been kicking herself for that for ten years. I can give you the back-story, if you want it.

And yeah... Jim. Poor Jim.
(no subject) - roseandheather on November 1st, 2009 10:42 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - mijan on November 2nd, 2009 04:14 am (UTC) (Expand)
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zhen123zhen123 on November 1st, 2009 08:38 pm (UTC)
This is one of the best fics I've ever read! Breathtaking.
Mijan: A Ship and a Star to steer her bymijan on November 2nd, 2009 10:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :)
celticdelove: Jim And Bones sweetheartscelticdelove on November 1st, 2009 09:27 pm (UTC)
WOW, WOW...just wow. This is absolutely stunning and there is so much I want to say about it but it would just take too long and I probably wouldn't be clear. Let me say reading fics like this is rare for me in any fandom but I've found very few fics that present the heart of the reboot Kirk/McCoy relationship so clearly and honestly.

Your characterizations of them were so real I can't not think of this as Canon, and I so wish this had a part of the movie. Your OC was absolutely brilliant, not just a filler! It would have just been so easy for you to write her off as the bad guy, and instead you made her a real tangible character who I will have a hard time not envisioning as a crucial part of the boys growth process at the academy. I enjoy smutt, and schmoop and angst and all that good stuff, but I am in love with good stories and this is a story well told!
Mijan: Bones&Kirkmijan on November 2nd, 2009 10:32 pm (UTC)
Thank you for the wonderful comment! And... I admit, this fic kinda cemented itself in my own brain as canon, so now I can't think of any of it without this as part of Jim's and Bones' personal back-stories.

I'm glad you liked Toland! It's always risky to write an OC, but I needed one for this story, and Toland just wove herself into the fic and wouldn't leave.

And I'm thrilled that you enjoyed how I presented the relationship between Jim and Bones. I think that level of friendship between them means a lot, whether it becomes sexual or romantic, or not. :)
ivorysilkivorysilk on November 1st, 2009 11:08 pm (UTC)
I really want to leave you a coherent, rational comment to tell you how much I enjoyed and admired your story--but that would take a while, and it would require clear, coherent, rational sentences. So let me just say that it was brilliant--I loved how well plotted the action sequences were, just how beautifully you showed how bright and unconventional Kirk is, how competent and intelligent and loyal McCoy is, how Starfleet works together, all of it. I particularly enjoyed Pike and how well drawn Toland was, and I spent all afternoon reading, sprinting towards the end while trying to slow down because I really didn't want to be finished. Such a wonderful fic.

The only criticism I have--if it is one, is that I think that they would have given Kirk a little more time to process--a few days isn't that long, and he might have settled if he'd had a week or a month or more to process what is, essentially, fresh trauma, and a pretty major one to boot. I thought that they were being unfair. But that's the only thing I can think of by way of critique, because the rest of it? Is amazing.

Also? Sam in this is pretty damm amazing in this too. I wonder what happenned to him after?

Thank you for writing this and for sharing it--I am sure this was a lot of hard work to write--but man, from a reader's perspective, was it worth it.
Mijan: Kirk/Bones: I've got youmijan on November 2nd, 2009 06:54 pm (UTC)
Okay, first I have to thank you for the utterly lovely compliment. I'm absolutely thrilled that you enjoyed it so much, and the characterization and everything. I'm immensely relieved that most people have actually liked Toland. I'm always hesitant to give an OC a major role of any sort because of the stigma about OC's, but this story absolutely needed one, and suddenly, Toland was there.

And yeah, "unconventional" is a great word for Jim. *grins*

Anyway, I've got something else for you. THANK YOU for pointing that out for me. And I mean that. I'm someone who takes concrit seriously because I figure it can only help me to improve, and I deeply appreciate anyone who actually bothers to tell me things like this!

Anyway, in my head, I had the rationale for the quick move to "snap Jim out of it," but I forgot to include it into the story! So I've actually edited the scene with Toland talking to McCoy just before Thanksgiving to include that background. I think this will explain their decision a bit better. I had it in mind, but I just never put it in. Stuff like that happens when you're mired in 63K words with a deadline. *grins sheepishly*

So here it is!

(no subject) - mijan on November 2nd, 2009 06:54 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Defying Auguryennyousai on November 2nd, 2009 12:10 am (UTC)
This was truly fantastic. Incredible props to you for great characterization, a detailed, well-though out plot, and really, really good writing. Bravo.
Mijan: Kirk/Bones: I've got youmijan on November 2nd, 2009 06:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :)
lulabel on November 2nd, 2009 10:10 pm (UTC)
What an amazing and astonishing story! I love the vibrant and dynamic relationship that you've developed between Jim and Bones - one which is very new and therefore mutable, but also quite deep and true and accepting. It was very moving to see them both trying to work through Jim's terrible trauma while still struggling to define the parameters of their friendship. And I adore your "almost slash" spin on how close they become - they might as well be lovers given the level of intimacy and affection they develop with each other. It's pretty much immaterial at that point whether there's actually any sex involved.

The secondary characters were great too - Pike and Toland were both very layered and realistic, with lots of lovely shades of gray and ambiguity.
Mijan: Kirk/Bones: I've got youmijan on November 4th, 2009 09:30 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Yeah, when two people go through a level of trauma together like that, especially when they've already kinda established themselves as a pair (regardless of whether it's a romantic situation), the type of closeness that results becomes intimate in a way. From there, yes, they could develop something romantic. Maybe they do. I'm going to write more Academy-years fics. But for now, I felt that THIS is what I wanted to show about their friendship and their relationship. You're right - the sex is immaterial at that point.

And yay! I'm glad you liked the secondary characters. It's sometimes hard to show secondary characters, especially OC's, without people thinking that they're trying to steal the show. This story is very much about Jim and Bones, but they don't exist in a vacuum, and I'm glad the supporting cast worked out. :)